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ALWAYS THINKING TOWARD THE NEXT STORY

March 21, 2018

When you’re a writer like me, and no, I’m not saying all of you are like me, I’m always thinking. I’ll admit my mind’s quite a bit in La La Land. I don’t mean “Ellay,” Los Angeles, Hollywood, or whatever you want to call that La La Land. I’m in my own La La Land, which is my dream world, where I come up with all this stuff that goes into my stories.

CURENT WORK IN PROGRESS (WIP)

Since I’m considered a “pantser,” in other words, a “seat-of-the-pants” writer instead of an outliner, I start with knowing A and B and everything in-between is an adventure. In other words, it’s a total surprise that develops as I write. My path to success is that I write so linear, I rarely get myself into a plot issue because I always have B in mind. I’m always working toward that point, so everything I dream (or La La Land) up, is working toward that goal.

I’ve mentioned this numerous times here at Fred Central. I get my inspirations from just about everywhere. It may be the most innocuous thing that strikes my fancy, or something profound. Whatever the case, I catalog that in the back of my brain, or maybe if it’s something I don’t need for a good while, it becomes an addition to one of my post-it notes above my computer monitor. It’s to the point now that a few of my post it notes have the sticky dried up and they’re now falling off, so I have them stacked on the computer tower.

THE NEXT STORY

Though I’m pretty set with Detach And His Search For Gold, with six manuscripts in the can, that doesn’t mean I don’t have room for more. In fact, I started number seven (West Virginia Gold), but got sidetracked with the first Meleena’s Adventures, so number seven of the Gold series languishes with just a few chapters.

That doesn’t mean I don’t have ideas lingering for further adventures. I’ve just saved my energy for more immediate priorities, at the moment. In fact, I came up with a great premise for book number eight tonight at dinner with friends. We’ll see if that one ever comes to fruition.

I’m currently done editing with the publisher on Gods Of The Blue Mountains, book number two of the Meleena’s Adventures series. Though that’s not the end of the process, I’m also writing book three and reading it to my writer’s group. Right now, my focus is on Meleena and my readers are screaming for more of her.

While I’ve had the basic concept for the fourth Meleena story in the back of my head for almost a year now, last night (as I write this), I finally came up with a conclusive A and B. It just happened. It’s not completely refined, but it’s there.

Keep in mind that A and B will never be written down beforehand. I never have and never will. The basic concept will be in my head and stay there until I sit down and start the book. It’ll never be an outline. What it will be is Chapter One and The End, when I get to them.

As for the Gold series? West Virginia Gold also has A and B in the can. I’ve had occasional ideas for further adventures (including the one I just came up with tonight), but they can wait, since I already have five other completed rough manuscripts.

SUMMARY

Now that I have the big picture for the fourth Meleena story, I can let it sit for a while, move on to other things.

You may ask, well…some of you…what about other novels? What about one-offs, or short stories, or whatever? Another series?

Don’t worry. That could very well happen as well. If the muse strikes, I’ll catalog that in the back of my head as well, and save it for a future date.

I just need the time to do it all.

That’s the problem with any writer!

Happy writing!

A RADIO FORUM (INTERVIEW)

March 14, 2018

I recently did a radio forum (interview) with author, entrepreneur and radio host James Kelly. He hosts the web site Aspects of Writing out of Henderson, Nevada. I had an absolutely wonderful experience as a last-minute guest.

I’ve talked about interviews in several articles here at Fred Central. Now, I have several videos under my belt as well as a phone interview. This forum was set up in such a way that I was a panelist and was able to give advice similar to what I do here, but at the same time was also interviewed as part of the setup to a forum on writing.

Two for one!

HOW IT STARTED

James Kelly was a guest speaker at one of our Henderson Writer’s Group meetings, which I attend every Monday evening. He gave an excellent presentation and afterward, I thought it would be a hoot to be a volunteer guest on his show. Later that evening, with one of his cards in hand, I e-mailed him and volunteered my services and gave him this web site and told him about all my articles and my platform on writing.

I soon got a call and he asked me if I could do a last-minute show. Unfortunately, I couldn’t make it that weekend. However, we kept in touch.

That was almost a year ago. At that time, I was under the impression we’d choose one of the subjects I talked about in my articles and took it from there.

Anyway, I kept in touch with him all this time.

A RECENT DEVELOPMENT

I’d just sent him an e-mail to say hello and he asked me if I was available for another cancellation. This time I was. I asked him about subject matter and he already had a script and everything. I go “as script?” Yup. I didn’t know that he plans these shows out ahead of time so when he calls in for his guests, he already knows what he wants to talk about. We don’t choose out subjects. He does the research on us first and decides the subject matter.

That’s okay with me.

I happened to fill a gap with the subject Writing With The Character In Mind.

Cool. I can do that!

TRIP TO THE STUDIO

I followed his directions and went to his studio, which was set up in a conference room in an office building in Henderson, Nevada. It was upstairs and since the building was deserted on this Sunday afternoon, we had the place to ourselves.

I met our cohost, Janet Coursey, and we had a nice chat while James set up the audio and tried to get the video link going with the other author on the show, John Brage from Kansas City, Missouri. It took a bit to get the kinks worked out of the audio with John. This is something that pops up occasionally with any home-brew radio pre-recording setup. I must say that given this is on James’ own dime, it was very professionally done and the final results are quite good.

THE SHOW

We first started in with mini-interviews about our writing and books and James switched between me, John and Janet and a little about himself and then we went into the subject of character. It was a lively discussion and we had a great time.

In the end, we all got to have our say and it actually went a little over. James will surely cull the best moments to cut it down to the proper time limit for the final product, which was an hour according to the video final result.

We were also being taped on camera as well. I was pretty much ignoring the camera, however I was looking at the computer screen with John on it, when talking to him. This took my face away from my mike, which made my voice dim at times. James had to tell me to talk into the mike a few times so I’m sure he had work to do to clean up my audio so I could be heard properly. There were also a few glitches with the audio feed from John’s end over the line from Kansas City.

SUMMARY

Overall, it was a fun interview and panel discussion. I got to plug my books. Not just Lusitania Gold but also Treasure Of The Umbrunna and got to talk about writing in general. It was a fun afternoon. The results can be heard through this link at http://www.blogtalkradio.com/aspectsofwriting/2018/02/26/writing-with-the-character-in-mind

James’ web site is http://www.aspectsofwriting.com/

Happy writing!

 

FACEBOOK AD RESULTS

March 7, 2018

I recently had a very successful book signing. As part of the buildup and marketing campaign to that book signing, I once again turned to Facebook to try their advertising.

I recently posted the article, Reaching Readers On Facebook, telling you about the experience. Now that the book signing is over, I want to go over the actual results of the advertising campaign. Though I’m dread to use foretelling in novels, here, I can. The results weren’t pretty.

IN THE BEGINNING

As a quick reminder, for those that are new to this site, last year, when Lusitania Gold first came out, I spent a lot of money on Facebook publicity around the book launch. At the same time, I also plugged my previous published novel, Treasure Of The Umbrunna. The total outlay was over $100 and included my ad to first the West Coast, then the entire You Ess And A and finally the western half of Europe.

The result? Plenty of hits (several hundred), a few engagements, three or four comments, one of them nasty (stop sending me ****ing spam), and zero sales.

LUSITANIA GOLD

In my latest article, Reaching Readers On Facebook, I only blasted the local Las Vegas area and a fifty mile radius that included Henderson, Boulder City, Pahrump, Indian Springs, etc.

I spent a total of $21. According to their statistics, I reached 322 people.

  1. I got 39 likes, 3 from people I know, 1 from a friend in Holland.
  2. 0 feedback.
  3. 2 shares.
  4. When I personally commented on the promo, THAT generated a few separate comments and likes from friends that already subscribe to my site. However, that was on the separate pages that those comments created (go figure).When I did my book signing at Barnes & Noble, not a single person that bought a book or showed up and talked to me were ones that found me from the Facebook advert.Let me be clear. I had a very successful book signing. I personally sold nine books and that same day, someone bought three other copies but somehow missed having me sign them. To me, that’s a killer day! However, unless one of those three that slipped in a bought without contacting me were Facebook people, I still have to mark my campaign off as a big fat ZERO. FAIR WARNINGON THE OTHER HANDHowever, to draw in new readers, it leaves a lot to be desired.Once they know you and like you is one thing…A BIG issue.
  5. Happy writing!
  6. Drawing them in is still an issue.
  7. I’m just saying.
  8. I do most of my news and events through Facebook with my two sites for the books. In that regard, it works well. I also still use my (this) web site. Facebook is a great communicator for letting people know what’s going on. In that respect, it works well to get immediate info to fans.
  9. If you’re contemplating using Facebook advertising, all I can say is buyer beware. It may work for some people, but so far, I’ve batted a solid zero after using it twice.
  10. My book signing was a success, it just didn’t have anything to do with Facebook or my $21.
  11. My $21 resulted in a big fat ZERO.
  12. The final result?

WHEN A BOOK HITS THE SPOT DOES IT INSPIRE YOUR WRITING?

February 28, 2018

I’ve talked a lot about what I think is good and bad writing, at least from my perspective. I’ve talked about making your readers having to suffer to get through what may be a good story, or glide right through without ever realizing they’re even reading.

How about those times when you read a book and it makes you want to sit down and write? Or, sit down and write more?

Have you ever read a book and loved it so much it inspired you to write something?

Something new?

Revamp what you were already writing?

Plug on, confirming what you already were doing, but with more enthusiasm?

THOSE MAGICAL STORIES

Because of my fantasy novels, I’m so used to spelling magical as magickal I had to think twice with that title! There are certain authors and certain stories that I glide through without effort. There are others I have to work a bit. Then there are others that I have to suffer to get through.

Since I’m part of the buying public, I like to spend my money wisely, therefore I also like to bet on a sure thing. Therefore, I often stick to authors I know are going to give me what I expect.

Like AC/DC, these authors aren’t out to fix something that isn’t broke. Usually. There have been a few that did and they lost me. On the other hand, most stick with a style and they keep me as a fan.

On the other hand, there are always the doldrums, times when none of my favorite authors have new books, and I troll the shelves looking for something new.

By discovering new authors, I run across plenty of duds. Sometimes I discover new ones and run across those magical stories. There are those rare novels that are so well written and the stories so great that I go…

Wow!

WHEN I GET THOSE WOW STORIES

I have to put this in the right context. There are certain writers that always hit that magical spot. They’re consistent. It’s when I find a new author that does it that’s especially magical. Then, I get more inspired.

What do I do?

I certainly don’t try to copy them.

What it does is make me try even harder to make my stories great. It doesn’t make me want to drop what I’m doing and start something new.

What these magical stories to for me is inspire me to write even more of what I’m already doing. It makes me allot more time to create and work on what I’m currently working on.

That, folks, is what it does for me. It gives me more enthusiasm to continue with my own creations.

It does not influence the style of what I’m doing.

It does not influence the actions of what I’m doing.

It does not influence the characters, the scenes, the language or the locations.

IN THE BEGINNING

I have to say up front that in the beginning, what I just said is exactly the opposite of what happened when I had those magic moments. Back in the day, when I first started writing, books by Clive Cussler, Lester Dent (Kenneth Robeson), Franklin W. Dixon, Mark Twain, just to name a few all had influence on my writing and style. As a developing writer, those magical moments inspired me to a great extent.

However, twenty plus years into this, my perspective has changed.

Now, when I read a really great and inspiring novel, when it hits the spot, it’s a bit different. My inspiration comes from a different place. The influence is not in the manner of characters or places or things, but of magic. It comes from the writer being able to keep the reader from suffering to get there.

SUMMARY

When a writer hits the spot, it’s now a combination of factors that inspire me. The way they write, how they present the story and how they pull it off in the end.

How I feel when I close the book.

Am I left with a big smile on my face?

Am I wanting for more, or am I relieved it’s over?

Am I heading for the bookstore, or going on line to see when the next book comes out? Or, am I scratching this author off the list or adding him or her to the “avoid at all costs” list?

If everything is positive, when I next open up my Word file, I flex my fingers, go to where I last left off and feel pretty good about what I want to do next. That’s where I’m at.

How about you?

Happy writing!

CONFERENCE TIME OF YEAR AGAIN – 2018

February 20, 2018

Wow, how time flies. April isn’t far off and it’ll be the Las Vegas Writer’s Conference time again. Since I’ve been going every year since 2005, this will be my 13th conference in a row. In a way, this is like my Christmas time of year. Since writing is more of a passion – a calling for me rather than a hobby, just like astronomy, I look at it the same way as my star parties when we go out to remote dark sites to observe the stars. I don’t expect most of you to look at the upheaval of your life and the expense of such a thing in the same way. That’s why I write a fresh approach to the same subject year after year here at Fred Central.

I know many of you have no desire to scroll through the 200+ articles I’ve written on the subject of writing craft, though I’d love it if you did! In that case, you’d find probably a dozen articles on writer’s conferences. To save you the time, especially for those new to my site, I’m presenting it fresh for you today (well, this is 2017’s article, tweaked). For those of you that have been around awhile and haven’t attended a conference, maybe it’s time and I can talk you into attending.

LEARNING THE CRAFT

There are many reasons to attend a writer’s conference. One of them is to learn the craft. Our conference is made up of training sessions that go on Thursday, Friday and Saturday. Each session covers various subjects that deal with writing, pitching, marketing, publishing, editing and everything you need to hone your skills. Folks, this is the meat of what you need to succeed at this passion/hobby/business. These sessions are held by experts in the field. This is the time to get first-hand knowledge, ask questions and learn valuable stuff you might never learn in an easier way.

This year, there will be an extra day, Sunday, where Jane Friedman is holding a workshop on The Art And Business Of The Author Platform. This workshop costs extra but it’s an intimate session, a one-on-one time with the master, who’s also the keynote speaker Saturday night.

NETWORKING

You’ll never find a more concentrated gathering of like-minded people, plus experts in one gathering. You not only get to talk to other writers, you get to mingle with publishers, agents, editors and marketers. You’ll hang out with them and pick their brains. You’ll have meals with them, chat them up in the halls between sessions, talk to them in the main room between events or just hang by the front desk and grab whoever walks by. Folks, this is the golden opportunity.

PITCHING YOUR WORK

If you have something ready to pitch, or even if you just want to practice, this is the place for you. The event is set up so you can schedule pitch sessions with the various agents and publishers. This is your chance to plug your story and see if they’re interested. There’s nothing better than face-to-face with an agent, rather than an anonymous letter or e-mail. I’ve had 100% success rate getting their attention, even if I’ve ultimately had 100% success rate at getting rejected. On the other hand, I obtained a step up over others in that these agents and publishers had a familiar face to attach to my work. I also obtained success in finding my publisher at this event, though not through the normal pitching process (a different story). At other conferences, often you have to pay separately to pitch to an agent. Here, that’s all part of the fee. Also, because of the limited attendance, you almost always have the ability to pitch to every agent you want to.

IT’S A GREAT THREE DAYS

We keep hearing over and over that the Las Vegas Writer’s Conference is one of the best in the nation. In fact, the Self-Publishing Mastery – The Independent Writer’s Home http://selfpublishingmastery.com/five-u-s-writers-conferences-not-to-be-missed-in-2018/ called our conference one not to be missed in 2018 and we came in at number three. That’s not a bad endorsement!

Because it’s smaller and more intimate, it’s a more quality event. We attract a quality staff and quality people. It pays for what most get out of it and we get lots of repeat attendees. I highly recommend it.

You can check it out at: http://hendersonwritersgroup.com/las-vegas-writers-conference/

Happy writing!

REACHING READERS ON FACEBOOK

February 14, 2018

I think I’ve talked about this before and the success, or rather lack of it I’ve had by using Facebook to market my books, at least so far.

First off, the inspiration for this article came from multiple sources. On one of the Facebook forums, someone asked the question (in so many words), what’s the one thing you like the least about writing, or what thing about writing gives you the most stress.

My answer was simple. “Nothing, except marketing.”

That’s not exactly what I said, but something like that.

I love everything about writing, from sitting down at the computer with a fresh idea, to editing the “mess” in the end and making it a final product, to tweaking the back cover blurb. I love it all.

Except…

Begging for people to buy it. That’s kind of how I feel a lot of the time when it comes to busking these stories to the public.

HAVING A REAL JOB

Since I’m not a full-time author who is making money hand-over-fist, or is retired and has the luxury of being able to drop everything to go off on book tours, or can afford to hire publicity teams, I have to rely on the down and dirty ways to push my book. For the most part, I’m restricted to the Las Vegas area and what I can do on line.

Facebook seems, or seemed like a great potential possibility.

Well, at least it did until I tried it and seen what it’s done for others.

FACEBOOK

With the advent of e-book sales and a new book launch, I invested a sizeable amount (over $100) into a publicity blast for both of my current novels on Facebook. I blasted first the west coast states, and then the entire You Ess And A. Then, I even blasted the UK, Ireland, Germany, Holland, France and Spain.

I have Facebook pages for both my books and of course, an author page on Amazon as well as both books not only on Amazon, but Barnes & Noble, Create Space and on my publisher’s web site, Mystic Publishers.

In a nutshell, given my rather meager income and what I invested in this publicity blast, I at best, generated a modest amount of likes to both my Facebook book pages, zero reviews and little sales as a result. I found out when I got my latest royalty check.

I did get one nasty note from some guy saying not to harass him with spam.

Ever since I did my publicity blast, my slow-but-steady hit rate on both of my Facebook book sites has remained about the same as before and after. In other words, outside of a slight tweak in numbers, my rate of hits on either page has remained almost unchanged.

I do get steady hits here and there. When I post something, my hits go up, then die off to an occasional like or new click. When I just did a recent promotion for my upcoming book signing on 24 February, I got more hits, but ran across another “maybe” complication, which I’ll explain further down.

WHAT I SEE

Lately, more than before, I’m getting more and more author book blasts. I politely click “like” on them to help them out, but only if the book really intrigues me do I ever take it further. If the books are something in a genre I’d actually read, sure, I’ll dig deeper, but so far, none of them have been anything I read. I’m all for stuff that I’m interested in. On the other hand, if I have to order it on line, and not find it in a bookstore, I have to hesitate, because I much prefer to touch it and feel it before I buy. On the other hand, that’s not to say I won’t buy it on line. I only read paper books but save for mass on-line orders of those books and don’t do it that often.

Unfortunately, that’s my own predicament with my book. It’s not in stores because I’m under a small publisher. I can well understand why others may be just as reluctant to purchase my book when they can’t go down to the local bookstore and find it on the shelf.

So, I see an increasing amount of book blasts on Facebook and I do check each and every one of them out and like them all, even if I’m not interested in the actual book. I believe in supporting all authors, at least initially. However, I have yet to purchase any that I’ve seen on Facebook simply because they’re not my genres. Maybe one day.

LATEST ATTEMPT

As I said above, I’m having a book signing coming up at the local bookstore. For that, I invested in a local Las Vegas/Henderson/Boulder City blast, specific to just those three cities (a fifty mile radius). I was hoping to generate some interest. Then, it’d be up to me once they show up at the store.

The result so far was not something I could’ve predicted, given what happened before.

I got this warning that I “wasn’t reaching enough people because my image contained too much text.”

Say what?

It’s a frigging book, for crying out loud! It has a title and my name! How am I supposed to display the book cover without the title and name? What’s up with Facebook and some arbitrary stupid rule about too much text in the image?

After much research I found out that “supposedly,” book covers are exempt from this rule. I mean, I get blasted with book adverts full of book covers all the time. Somehow they’re circumnavigating this rule all the time. I figure I’m okay, but I still keep getting this warning. Is it affecting my reach?

As of today, as I edit and post this, which is still pretty early in the game, I’ve reached 276 people and engaged 31. I’ve got 31 clicks, 26 likes and 3 comments and 2 shares. Folks, that’s some activity so I can’t complain, but it’s blasting to supposedly several million people. I’ve spent $25 to run it until the 24th. I don’t know how Facebook limits who they send it to, or if that image limitation is really exempt.

SUMMARY

Facebook could and should be a great marketing tool yet it isn’t. At least not for everyone.

For the small-time author, it’s a real struggle. With the potential to reach millions, we’re lucky to reach tens, or so it seems. We may be reaching a lot more than that, but getting a reaction from them is like getting blood out of a turnip, and no apologies for the cliché. No matter how well written, how good our graphics are, when you’re an unknown and don’t have a book on the shelf, you have an uphill struggle. It’s hard for any amount of money or blasting to overcome that. Plus, Facebook is a big mystery as to how they really function and whether they’re worth the bother.

I wish I knew the magic key to fixing all that without going broke.

Happy writing!

ORGANIZING YOUR STORY BY POV

February 7, 2018

As many of you know at Fred Central, I’m a fanatic about controlled point of view (POV). Whether the ultimate in first-person, which I’m personally not a fan of, or my preferred third-person, to me, it has to be controlled. Otherwise, I get jerked out of the story.

When an author head-hops within scenes or chapters, it’s like taking a thread and adding branches to it while maintaining the main thread. The branches that are tied on, loop around and tie back into the main branch further down. In other words, I have to follow two threads simultaneously within the story flow.

This blurs and weakens the impact of the story, not only to me, but to other readers. It may be slight, but the way I look at it, the fewer barriers you, the writer put up between you and the reader, the better.

There are countless things about our writing that get in the way of conveying our stories to the public. One of the easiest to overcome is point of view. You can fix this barrier by simply keeping your stuff together and eliminate a host of other problems.

BY CHAPTER OR SCENE

Time and time again, I’ve talked about keeping the POV in the head of one character. If you have multiple character POVs, and you want to switch heads, change the scene or chapter. Simple as that.

Don’t head hop. The best way is to have say…the main character in chapter one. Then switch to a side character or the bad guy in chapter two, then switch back to the main character, etc.

When scenes get more intense, do it by scenes within a chapter instead of by chapters.

Some grand poohbahs at a conference a few years ago, I think it was a romance conference, gave head-hopping a pass because of the intense romantic elements. That seemed to open the floodgates for a lot of lazy writing and I distinctly remember noticing a lot of head hopping in mainstream novels ever since, especially in thrillers during heavy action scenes. Soon, I was seeing entire books with a pseudo-omniscient POV scenario and then some books with no POV at all.

It’s like the floodgates opened and there was a total breakdown of character control. There were certain authors that stuck to controlled POV and folks, those books were such a dream to read! The contrast was, and still is, like night and day.

CHAPTER TITLES

The inspiration for this week’s article comes from a recent icky bug novel that I just finished. A weird story in itself of how I found it, I’d bought a Michael Crichton book two weeks before, got home and discovered I’d already read it. So, with receipt in hand, I took the Crichton back to Barnes & Noble and got a refund. Then I went right back to the shelves and re-browsed, looking for something else. To my great surprise, I stumbled across this icky bug novel, which was a total shock. Not only does B&N hardly ever shelve any icky bug, but traditional publishing hardly ever does.

I had to carefully page through this one to look for certain red flags. Often, these horror (icky bug) novels end up being nothing but literary character studies with bummer endings. I had to slow down, page through it a bit and even sneak a look at the ending to make sure there were survivors. From what I could tell, there were survivors.

Turns out I was pleasantly surprised and delighted. It was a very good book. Not only that, but it was written in solid third-person, past tense and solid, controlled POV. What makes it unusual is that the author not only organized it by character/chapter, but actually named the chapters after the character’s POV. That way, I knew exactly who’s head I was in and the author stuck to it.

This was a unique way of organizing the book. I’ve seen it done this way before, though not often.

The thing is that it worked and worked well.

The result was that all things considered, I breezed through the book. There were no barriers getting in the way.

SUMMARY

I’ve said it over and over again and will continue to do so. When you organize the POV into characters and keep it clean, the story flows so much better! It’s not just a matter of “It’s the story that counts,” because in addition, the writing isn’t getting in the way.

I must also note that I’m editing a story in a genre that I’d normally never read. Even though the subject matter is not my normal interest, the author writes in solid third-person, past-tense with controlled POV and I find myself absorbed in the work because the POV is right there.

That says something. That’s one less barrier, whether conscious or unconscious to your readers you may or may not be aware of.

Keep that in mind as you organize your work.

Happy writing!

RAMBLING ON AND ON

January 31, 2018

To continue in the same thread as Description – When Do You Zone Out, I ran across the perfect example. The day I started that article, I also started what I thought was a science fiction thriller. It turned out to be a literary speculative slog of a character study.

It not only described the room, but rambled on and on and on and on and on about each character, and then went on to ramble about the philosophy behind the science of the plot. A red flag should’ve been that the author has a PHD. I’ve run across this before with another “thriller” writer. In this other case, his books ramble so much, I could barely get through them, though at least there’s a bit more action than this five-hundred page tome. The only reason I finished this one was because I paid for it.

A CHARACTER STUDY

Though I should say right up front, I’m no fan of literary fiction, for those of you that are, this book might’ve been right up your alley. It was page after page after page of internal feelings of each character. Mixed in were detailed descriptions of each location and on top of that, the philosophy behind what they were doing.

This amounted to very long chapters, long paragraphs, and almost no action.

To make things worse, the author followed no particular point of view, though it was at least third-person, past-tense. However, when the POV was in one character’s head, as soon as another character showed up, the author popped right into their head and then back to the other character without changing scenes or chapters.

The point is that while I dragged through page after page of inner thoughts and feelings of a character, I kept waiting for something to happen. I was actually paging ahead, looking for something…some kind of break to see if anything was going on.

PHILOSOPHICAL RAMBLING

The premise of the book was interesting. I’ll give the author that. There was also a good bit of technical discussion thrown in. However, it was, like the character thoughts, buried in page after page after page of rambling exposition. Need I say more?

TENSION

I think, or at least thought this was supposed to be a thriller.

However…

Though there were several very tense scenes, or what should’ve been tense scenes, guess what happened? At the worst possible time, the author stopped the action to go off on a ramble with character. Yup, right when things might’ve picked up and he could’ve generated some decent tension and thrills, he brought all that to a screeching halt to go off on another character study with thoughts, feelings and emotions. The result was that every…and I mean EVERY thrilling scene became a total dud.

RESULT

This book could’ve easily been two hundred and fifty instead of five hundred plus pages. Then, given the ending, while semi-satisfying, could’ve been salvaged to make this a decent thriller.

I almost put the book down several times. Throughout, I drifted…a lot. However, I also forced myself to pay attention, especially in the first half in case I missed some key plot point, which I didn’t. The main reason I never put it down, was, like I said before, because I paid for it and wanted to get my money’s worth.

Well, I got it in words.

SUMMARY

I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again.

You shouldn’t torture your readers. You shouldn’t make your readers suffer to get to the end.

Do you think I’m just too biased? Uh, I don’t think so, given the reviews I saw before I posted my own two-star on Amazon. The author garnered plenty of five star reviews, of course, because there are those that love the literary side of things. However, the majority of those that like thrillers and getting to the point sure voiced their displeasure and it showed in the one and two star reviews. Mine among them.

If only somewhere on the cover, the description included “literary” I could’ve saved my money and this never would’ve happened. There are plenty of tomes out there that do exactly that. Right there on the cover is the word “literary.” That’s my kryptonite. I know to avoid that book at all costs. If that were somewhere on this book, either in the blurb or in the endorsements, I could’ve saved some bucks I would’ve used better for something I’d have enjoyed.

A little truth in advertising never hurts.

Happy writing!

DESCRIPTION – WHEN DO YOU ZONE OUT?

January 24, 2018

I’ve talked about descriptions quite a bit here at Fred Central. Though I have nothing personal against the literary crowd, as a reader, I like the author to get to the point. As a writer, I try to reflect that as well.

I, in no way, have attention deficit disorder, or attention deficit hyperactivity disorder. I know this is a common condition that manifests in a lot of people nowadays. It can make it hard for people afflicted with it to stay focused. Therefore, one needs to keep on task to maintain their attention.

This is not what I’m talking about…at all.

There are those of us that just like to cut to the chase. It’s as simple as that. While we can sit through endless slogs of “whatever” to get to a point, generally, we much prefer to get there and avoid the fluff. That doesn’t mean we have any mental or psychological condition. We just have better things to do with our time.

CUT TO THE CHASE

The literary writer is in love with words. Well, let’s think about that. We, as writers are all in love with words. That is, after all, our entire reason for being here in this passion of writing. The difference is that as genre writers, some of us prefer to make our point in as few words as possible, where the literary writer stops to smell the roses, to dig deep into descriptions, feelings etc.

Someone who enjoys literary writing doesn’t mind taking three chapters to get across the street. On the other hand, someone who likes to get to the point would much prefer that happened in two or three sentences.

Big difference.

The reality is that with most writers, it all falls somewhere in-between.

One can cut to the chase, but still throw in a little of the kitchen sink without adding in the dirty dishwater.

TOLERANCE FOR EXPOSITION AND RAMBLING

I can only go so far with the description of a room. General size, shape, what’s in it as in major items are good enough for me. The main point is what’s significant in the room that’s key to the story and plot is all I really care about. The rest of it’s just window dressing. I zone it out. How many sentences or words does it take to accomplish that?

When I’m on the third paragraph and we’re still describing the room, guess what I’m doing? I’m treading water. I’m zoning out. I’m only coasting along in case I miss something key to the story. I can count on my hand…one hand…in the hundreds if not more books I’ve read lately that rambled like that, where there was something within all that blather that really mattered toward the plot/story/anything. It was pure fluff, rambling by the author. Maybe it was literary, meant for those that love words, but for someone like me, it was the old adult in the Charlie Brown cartoons. “Wah wah wah wah wah.”

WHAT’S YOUR DESCRIPTION TOLERANCE LEVEL?

Be honest with yourself. When is it that you zone out when you’re reading a description of something? Now, translate that to your own writing. As much as you burn to describe something in detail, sit back, take a breath and read through it again.

Where, as a reader, would you zone out?

What can you cut that doesn’t really add anything except additional color, flavor, bla bla bla to the description? Is it really necessary?

Everyone has their own tolerance level. I certainly do. There are certain things I want to put in. Sometimes it’s a balance of what I want, versus what I need.

Sometimes a room is just a room.

Sometimes a forest is just a forest.

On the other hand, they can’t all be drab with no detail.

Your world can’t be gray. You have to color it in!

The key is that you don’t want to slather on the paint so thick you obscure the picture.

How’s that for an analogy?

To reverse what I just said, in your story, no room is just a room. If it is, it doesn’t need to be there.

That’s right, if that room needs to be there, it has a purpose so it needs a description. A simple description will do, but simple can be quite detailed at the same time. It doesn’t have to be thirty pages, just a few simple words.

Remember, words have power.

You don’t want those words to lose that power to where the reader zones out, especially if that room is just a small part of the journey.

Keep reader tolerance level in mind with every part of your story. Everything has a purpose and you need to consider how you apply the “paint” to your word canvas.

SUMMARY

Whether literary or action based, you need to find your balance. If you’re a writer, you should also be a reader. I don’t see how you can write without understanding your potential audience (unless you don’t care). You can only reflect what you like to read and adjust from there, depending on what your goal is.

Happy writing!

CRITIQUE OF A BATCH OF SELF-PUBLISHED BOOKS

January 17, 2018

This article was going to be in a couple of weeks, but the discussion came up, off air, prior to a recent radio interview I did with author James Kelly. It seemed a good idea to bring it up now.

While I don’t actively discourage self-publishing, I also take it as a cautionary tale. The fact is that when you present your work to the public in a do-it-yourself manner, all the expertise rides on your shoulders.

While there are a few of you that go to great lengths to do it right, and there are some tremendous success stories, there are way too many that self-publish because they just can’t cut it in the traditional world. Or, they don’t want to wait and do it right. Or, they never hit that string of luck. Or…they just don’t want to follow the rules.

While some rules seem tedious and overbearing, they’re there for a reason. Those annoying “rules” bear some weight when it comes not only to attracting readers, but keeping them.

This is not to say that traditional publishing is immune to pushing out crappy books. If you’re a reader, you know this. I’m sure you’ve gone through plenty of books that you’ve either struggled to finish, never finished, or were pissed off when you did finish them. Or, you were ultimately disappointed in the end.

Unfortunately, in the self-publishing world, this crappy book thing is far more predominant. After all, editing, formatting, artwork, the whole caboodle costs. It can cost a lot, and cutting corners on any of it shows in the end product — what you’re attempting to put in the hands of readers. If you go into this blind, without going through the proper steps that steer you the right way, like some authors are prone to do, you end up with a total mess.

Okay, there are some readers that are blind to all of this. They can read anything. They may notice something is a bit off, but if they like the story, that’s good enough for them. Most readers are more discriminatory. They have world-wary insight into what smells right and what doesn’t. They’re more invested in their genre (or interest) when they pick up a book. When an author throws stuff out there with minimal effort and quality, they poison the well.

A RECENT BATCH OF ICKY BUG

One of the things I asked for this Christmas was a batch of icky bug novels off Amazon. Yeah, I say Amazon because I have no other choice. Our one and only local bookstore (for new books, that is), Barnes & Noble, doesn’t carry very much icky bug. In case you’re new to this site, what I’m talking about is horror novels. Icky bug is my term for horror, but not just any horror. I’m talking b-movie monster horror, like the old Chiller Theater Saturday afternoon horror from the 50’s through 60’s, like we used to get in the good old days.

These stories are still out there, and it’s as rare as hen’s teeth to see them in a traditional bookstore, traditionally published. What gets traditionally published in horror? Usually character studies with bummer endings. Yup, literary stuff that I not only would not read, but would “literally” throw back on the shelf, not just place back on the shelf. I despise that stuff, and that seems to be all that ever makes it to the bookshelves.

Therefore, I have to resort to buying them on-line from the “only” real source out there with an easily-accessed variety, Amazon. There, I can find all kinds of b-movie icky bug novels. The only difference is that ninety percent of them are self-published. I have to carefully look through the usually mediocre (at best) covers, then browse the “peek inside” previews.

The peek inside previews are critical because I won’t even bother unless the story is written in third-person, past-tense. I can usually tell by a quick scan through the entire sample if the author sticks with that. I can also get a quick sample of the initial quality of the writing, though not near enough for the entire book.

Sometimes I scratch the book off the list from the sample. Very rarely, the cover is enough, though I’m not one to usually judge a book by its cover.

This year, I opted for four novels that intrigued me, all by authors I’ve never tried before.

WHAT I FOUND

First off, as I suspected, all four novels were obviously self-published. Given the red flags, there was no doubt. However, it wasn’t all bad. In fact, I liked all four novels, but some had serious flaws.

The covers.

Three of the novels had decent covers. The artwork was not all that bad. They might’ve passed for a traditional publishing house. The fourth was downright cheesy. It was just awful, but even that didn’t deter me from buying the book. I don’t care that much about the cover. However, I can see that one sitting on the shelf in a bookstore, skipped over time and time again by readers. It “literally” screamed “self-published.”

The formatting.

One of them, the best of the bunch, was the most professionally done. The formatting was flawless. From page one to the end, I didn’t see a single glitch. On the other hand, the other three, especially one of the others that happened to have a decent cover, was full of formatting errors. It was like the editor(s) (who did a lousy job) went in for last-minute corrections, but never fixed the formatting after making the changes. Paragraphs were out of place, there were gaps between words, lines were interrupted and dropped to the next line. You name it. Oh, and random capitalizations dotted the paragraphs.

The editing.

In the one with the crummy cover, the editing was atrocious. There were run-on sentences, repeated words, sentences that didn’t make sense. Oh, and the author didn’t know the difference between American and British English. No, this was not a Canadian or British release.

Point of view.

All but one of them had no point of view. They were semi-omniscient, which is to me, a red flag for self-publishing. When there’s no control of point of view, it tells me there was no editor to make the author stick with any controlling characters. I know that in traditional publishing, emphasis on point of view is becoming less and less, but it’s still at least some kind of emphasis. In these books, POV was willy-nilly with no character controlling anything. A complete, head-hopping mess. There was only one book where it had solid third-person controlling POV. That was, by the way, the only five star review I gave of the entire bunch.

Story.

While I enjoyed all four stories, except for the one, they all had their flaws. In one of them, nothing, and I mean nothing happens from the prologue all the way through two-thirds of chapter one. I’ve talked about starting a story with a bang. In this case, there was no bang until page thirty. That would never happen (or shouldn’t) in a traditional novel, unless it’s literary and folks, this was no literary story!

Second, one of the books, while a fun story, had a serious flaw in that the main characters (and there were several), were never put in serious jeopardy. While there was a high body count, none of the action involved the main characters. For an icky bug novel, that’s kind of the point. The main characters have to be put in some kind of jeopardy that they have to get out of.

In the one with the crummy cover, the supposed main character, at least according to the back cover, never did the main hero stuff. He was always in the wings while someone else did the hard work. He just stepped up at the appropriate time to help out and take the credit. Huh?

SUMMARY

It isn’t all just about the story. There has to be something more. Getting you stuff out there, and doing it by cutting corners, or by not following the rules doesn’t always work. In a sample of four self-published books, I found one that did it right. Four random books.

The odds should be better than that.

I’m not trying to discourage self-publishing, if you’re going to do it, please do your research. Don’t get in a rush just to get it out there and shoot yourself in the foot. Remember, it’s your legacy. More and more, there are plenty of self-publishing success stories. If you want to be part of that crowd, slow down, take the time to do it right so your book doesn’t sit out there on the web and languish with a couple of lousy reviews or one or two good ones by friends, while nobody else will review it for fear of hurting your feelings.

Do it right.

Happy writing!